I used to be able to toss words and actions around so carelessly,
I was spreading stars into the night sky, so easily, so rushed, so many memories.
Now they're caught in my mouth like the frog I swallowed last Summer,
And my hands like wriggling fish swallowing each other.
I think I'll bleed the worm like wires under my flesh and let you know.
They're still hurt and green and hate hate hate.
Your hate is like a scratched throat, sick of screaming, but still there's a will.
My hate is like a beautiful cursed jewel, it's caused me so much pain, but I can't let it go,
But it's better than it used to be.
My hate's on the paper now.
I don't need black and I don't need rock bands and I don't need cool clothes
To be myself. I think that a member of my past would know that.
Your love is like a dragon fly, shy and gentle, but only lands on few.
My love used to be like a fire, burning everyone who dared, but always tempting them.
There's a fog between us,
We're in a fairy-tale.
(I'll be the frog if you'll be the princess and we can get our friends to be the fairy godmother)
I think, I think I'm ready to fall, even if no one is there to catch me. I'm ready to drown.
I've held my breath long enough
Your breath is like the wisps of hair caught in my eyes.
My breath is like a fast hearbeat.
I'm a little android, fast and angry.
Beretta.
I'm going to fall.
I'm falling.
My tears are reaching towards the sky as I'm reaching towards the earth.
Am I falling off of you or off of me?
Your voice is like a calculator and your words are like the stars.
My voice is like girl out in the rain and my words are the stars.







Devious Comments
To be myself. True words nicely said.
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I don't need a signature.
Your hate is like a scratched throat, sick of screaming, but still there's a will.
Your love is like a dragon fly, shy and gentle, but only lands on few.
Your breath is like the wisps of hair caught in my eyes.
My tears are reaching towards the sky as I'm reaching towards the earth.
Am I falling off of you or off of me?
I love how there are some subtle and gentle elements and then there are some sharp and forward truths which are extremely expressive. You create amazing images, believe me this poem looks terrific in images in my head
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Una canzone può anche non parlar d'amore...
"A song can also not talk about love..."
Thank you! I like those lines, too! (Actually I like the whole thing, so it's like saying yes to, "Is your favorite colour blue?" when your favorite color is rainbow.)
Thank you, I had a great time combining the soft elements with the strong ones. Thank you, I love being expressive! Oh, you can see it, wow!
What did you interpret it as? Thank you! Thank you, that's why I'm not worried about art/literature theft because all of my poems are well-known and totally and completely me! Thank you!
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I don't need a signature.
Well well well.. you've got some images firing in my mind there, I love the same lines as Danielle, actually
What I especially liked, was the way that from looking at it first off, it looks so jagged, but then reading it, it flowed really well in my head.
It's very... it's very you. And i like that
The only thing I could suggest to improve is the use of the word "hate" and use words of a similar meaning to keep it from being competitive - UNLESS you were aiming for a punch each time you say the word, then don't change a thing!
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Dum spiro spero.
Thank you. What can you see? You and Danielle are similar in some ways.
How does it look jagged? The words or the form or something else?
Thank you, that's what I was aiming for. It's about the first she, the second, and SHE.
I was, I wanted it to hurt because I was hurt, and it felt good letting it out.
Thank you! Could you explain your interpretation of it? I want to see what you think.
I say a huge swirl of emotion, from looking on to the past and having it hit you right in the throat when you remember,
having dealt with that, realisation of a little hate,
and then a moving on type feel when it got to the dragonfly bit
The form. Because the length of the lines are not consistent (not a bad thing) and some lines are only a few words long. That does seem to fit with the changing emotions.
For me, it was dealing with some sort of heartache, and moving on. Not moving on from the person, just... moving away from the problem, and actually closer to them.
I have nooo idea if that's what you intended.. I tend to inperpret things every which way.
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Dum spiro spero.
Nice, and pretty much on the spot.
I didn't really want to fix it, that's just how it cam out.
Yep, you got it!
You didn't want to... interesting.
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Dum spiro spero.
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