Eleanor walked in, sucking a tangerine popsicle with such intensity that you would think it could cure cancer. Or loneliness. The house looked bare, like someone hadn't lived in it for a while, but it had stayed clean. Sticky, sunny drops of frozen tangerine concentrate landed on her shirt.
"I wish there was an ocean," Eleanor said to no one; there was no one to say it to.
The rain struck the window like friends leaving and the lightning crashed like heartbreak psoriasis. There was only one thought in her head: alone. She began to recite a song,
"We didn't choose to be alone, but now we can be alone together..." her voice trailed off as a bride's dress would down the aisle.
Eleanor put her hands and right cheek to the window.
"Look at her," she thought, "She's so lucky. She hasn't a problems." The thunder shook the window as though it was nodding in empathy.
Eleanor sat on her bed, wondering whether she should get up and if the ever would. She rolled over and took a last shot of coccaine.







Devious Comments
I like how it leaves open the questions like "Why is she so depressed?" "Who is she?" ...
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I wanted to create her, but she seemed to mystical like a flower of smoke...I really wanted you (readers) to make her up, who you think she is.
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Okay, you may have won the battle...but you have not won the war! I'm still working on a picture to try and get a sub with!
Hmm... usually you say Mama... so it's about the same
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Is this awesome!!?? Do you know what they're saying??
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you got me curious as to what was happening, and I've now read it a couple of times.
I think it's quite clever how you've managed to make links to cancer, psoriasis and coccaine in the same piece.
It's fantastic to be seeing work from you again, you've been away for a while now.
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Who is Eleanor in your head? What does she look like? I did this like a script; sometimes the actors go offstage to tell eachother something, but it's not in the script, you have to figure it out.
Oh, thank you.
Thank you..there will be more soon...possibly today.
excccccellent
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Righto.
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